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Forum postGets smoother when your voice settles down (after the intro). Oh crap, the chorus is going to get stuck in my head again. Damnit, Jon!
Jon Eric - Spanish Lessons
(...in Subtitle-o-vision!)
When the time came, he made his first million
He knew in his heart he had to start buildin'
He pulled up in a Tahoe, said "Tengo trabajo"
["I have work"/"I have a job" (i.e. for you to take)]
They got in 'cause they needed a job
Well he spoke no español, he told them they could go
But none of the workers would stop
(chorus)
*No hablo, no hablo, no hablo no español
No hablo, no hablo, no hablo no español*
The building is getting so high
And nobody seems to know why
No hablo, no hablo, no hablo no español
["I don't speak Spanish"]
When it got bad, he hired a new tutor
She pulled up the driveway on a blue scooter
(said) You can say "What did he say," or "Como se dice"
["How does one say," or more idiomatically, "How do you say"]
Until you turn azul in the face
["blue"]
But you made 'em into zombies, and they tienen hambre,
["Have hunger," or "are hungry."]
And soon they're gonna run the whole place.
(chorus)
Gets smoother when your voice settles down (after the intro). Oh crap, the chorus is going to get stuck in my head again. Damnit, Jon!
First vocal lines are too frantic. Vocals are mixed badly, they don't sit in the mix at all. I like the passion you're putting behind your singing during this competition. You need to take your vocal recording to the next step, to match with your keyboard parts, which are nice if a bit too much of the arrangement. Main key should be more in the background-- your singing shoudl be the focus, not that piano part which is sort of vampy and extemporaneous. The accelerando is fine but I didn't give a crap about it.