Caravan Ray
Forum postExecution is perfect. Like, really perfect. The lyrics fit the song. It is a beautiful song. "I hear the kids say yeah yeah yeah" - that is exactly the type of thing I wanted to hear this round for this title. Well done.
Kids
by Merisan
We all start out so beautiful
Without a care in the world
Those wild haired boys
And wide eyed girls
I never realized
How impossible it would feel
Didn’t know I’d need to look back
Just to remember what’s real
I wanna dream all day
Don’t wanna feel afraid
I wanna feel loved and protected
From my own grown-up ways
And all the kids say yeah yeah yeah
yeah yeah yeah
yeah yeah yeah
Loud and sweet you tell the truth
Speak your mind without a care
How did I get so far
From when I used to share?
Life can be so messy
And even when I try to clean it
I still need some one to guide me
It gets harder to admit
I wanna dream all day
Don’t wanna feel afraid
I wanna feel loved and protected
From my own grown-up ways
I hear the kids say yeah yeah yeah
yeah yeah yeah
yeah yeah yeah
NOTE: percussion = brushes on a box, hand claps, house music bass drum noise made with my mouth with lots of effects on it
Execution is perfect. Like, really perfect. The lyrics fit the song. It is a beautiful song. "I hear the kids say yeah yeah yeah" - that is exactly the type of thing I wanted to hear this round for this title. Well done.
I'm sorry, but I'm starting to think this vocalist could sing anything & I'd like it. Thought it was sweet, and catchy. Didn't really stand out...but it was good.
This is my favorite song other than ours. The melodies are impeccable. The song structure is awesome. The execution is perfect. I’ve been watching a lot of Glee lately (my 5 year old daughter makes me). This fits right in with the ready for TV production. The breakdown is my favorite part. The little nitpick I have is that there’s that damn Hand clap pattern AGAIN. Perhaps that isn’t fair since I listen to your catalog all the time. Well there’s something that is a shaker, but other than that, I think it’s all a capella. That saddens me a bit, I thought you guys would have been super clever with non-instrument instruments. The song doesn’t need it, it’s just that pesky challenge thing fiddling with expectations for a song. This is just awesome. My kids get up and dance when I have it playing, it’s nearly the cutest thing not related to a cat you’ll ever see, because they join in on the “…yeah yeah yeah”. Awesome!
Sweet and delicate. I agree with the comment about almost not needing the lyrics. They seem to place behind all of the cozy vocal work. However, the yeah yeah lines are hooky. Best part is the bridge. Time stands still and all is puffy clouds and warm sun. Makes the return to the main body all energetic. Great stuff, most likely to win, I'm betting.
Great example of how a pretty sparse vocal arrangement can be quite effective. Shoddy timing on the "shaker" detracts a bit, but not too much. Would have enjoyed a bit more oomph in the vocals in some parts. Like the other songs I've listened to so far, this doesn't really have a very strong hook, but it's a nice little song that I like very much as long as it plays. Great job getting that sentiment across in the lyrics.