That guitar riff is too prominent for something not that interesting. The bass and second guitar don't really notice when they come in for several seconds. maybe this just needs mastering? Heh cute take on the lyric - obvious rhyme not arriving. Again, there's a lot of interest here but it's not quite the finished product - not that I am going to judge on that. That take on the lyric seems to have got forgotten. A little shabby but not bad. Oh I like the drum rolls and tom use a lot.