A+ liner notes, and I really like the way you've used the time signature, repeating vocal, dissonant guitar and that drunk lad prick on BVs to accentuate the anxiety in the lyrics. The bouncy synths still feel catchy, it's an unsettling pop song and I like it a lot.

Concept of an OD experience (or what felt like one anyway) is a unique take. Scansion issues: REcepTIONist. Blood presSURE. Good lyric: "barely a response, points to a hospital on the tourist map / sends me on my way / a dagger in my chest / but nobody wants a death on the premises I guess". I like that you've written in a non-standard time signature without even being required to! 😉 The timing on "youregonnadieyouregonnadie" starts to drift off. I'm not sure if this was an intentional choice to emphasize feelings of panic from the song, but it doesn't lean hard enough into the off-timing. If you introduced other elements like off-key melodies, harsh atmospheric sounds, alarm klaxons, or something along those lines it would be more obviously an intentional choice. I do hear a little bit of distortion creeping into the vocals toward the end, like maybe you were going for this. Either way, it sounds more like a mistake as it is. The low harmony vox are nice, but it's a very small part of the song and feels like maybe just an afterthought for the sake of ticking the challenge box.

I love this tune. I have been there, like, right there. I really appreciate all the way the music and the lyrical concept are one artistic statement. Vom sounds like someone I’d rather avoid in a dark alleyway. That being said, the verse is catchier than the chorus for me, because I really wanted a change of some kind, a creeping menacing bass drone note or something, building tension really. This seems to be a theme for me today.

Subject matter reminds me of my "Heart Shaker"
Strength: production, soundgarden-sounding leading guitar
Weakness: some word delivery, inaccessible lyrics

This was the most memorable song to me after my first listen through everything. You have such a strong voice as a lyricist--this was one of the songs I ended up ranking very high as it felt like a real, personal song and was nicely evocative with the details you drop in like the heat and the smell of sewage. The vocal melody is kind of meandering--I like the rhythmic phrasing a lot, but there are a few prosody issues that Evermind already pointed out, and I think a bit more dynamic or harmonic movement throughout could have elevated this. On the other hand, I also think because of the story-song nature of the lyrics it doesn't really need to be so structured. The bridge was my favorite part by far--that crazy gross-sounding instrument that comes in there (A++!) and the woozy-panicked "you're gonna die" chant that builds and builds--so weird, so great. The guest vocals work well to embiggen those lines and mix up the feel a bit.

Such a great story to use as inspiration (though probably not so much for you at the time). This is chock full of cracking lines - "...death on the premises..." "catatonia/Catalonia," "Shame dripping out of every pore" - and I love the woozy feel of the whole track which sits nicely with the subject matter. The chorus is suitably excellent and I love how the "I'm gonna die" refrain gets louder and more insistent as it drills into your brain. Best ending of the round too. You've said what you need to say, so get the hell out of there! There are a couple of out tune vocal moments but I think you get away it, as its the sort of song where the performance is more important than perfect pitch.