I really like the twitchy guitar part very much, but not the vocal. Not that it's bad, just drab and steals the fun out of the tune. I do like the "it if helps" BVs but they come and go and then we're back to the drab bits.
Entry from Drag Me Around in Nur Ein XVI.
Song must bridge your Round 0 and Round 1 songs
I'll admit to being confused by what you wanted with this challenge, and I think it's resulted in a confused lyric that only barely makes sense to me, and also requires people to remember my first two songs, which I realise is asking a lot when there's 24 others in the competition. So I'm hoping that those judges who aren't reading liner notes won't mark me too harshly if the lyrics don't make a lot of sense to them. They still might not make sense after reading the notes.
Liner notes:
Spoiler
This song is about my broken brain. I think I have a bit of an unhealthy fixation on things that are out of my control, wanting to try and impose myself upon them, and that comes through in a lot of my lyrics - whether that's feeling guilt about things that I can't directly effect and have nothing to do with me (as in my first song Semiprecious, about the exploitation of workers and more specifically the Myanmar jade trade), or a near constant fixation on death and illness (as in my second song Pareidolia, about freaking out riding the subway during the pandemic). When I write songs about these sorts of things it feels very narcissistic, like taking these massive issues or concerns that effect everyone and saying "but how does this effect ME?". This song is basically trying to capture my snide inner monologue that constantly calls me out for being an narcissistic idiot who things he's the protagonist of existence, while also undermining me at every turn with anxiety, fear, self-hatred and all the other fun stuff a broken brain is wont to do. I liked the idea of this voice "dragging me around", pulling me between all these different negative emotions and mental health crises.
The first verse directly comments on my first song - mocking the idea that because I read an article about jade mining I'm suddenly some human rights expert, with a couple of punny callbacks in "he really puts the me in mine" and "some jaded arsehole". The second verse references my subway anxieties from my round one song, "sat on the Inner Circle seeing things that aren't there" (the inner circle is a line on the Glasgow subway), and the "paranoia, pareidolia" hook from that song is echoed here in the "paranoia, panic attack" lyric.
Hopefully it makes some sense. As I say I found this challenge a real struggle and hope I haven't completely gotten the wrong end of the stick, but to my ears this would work as a linking track between my first and second song.
Drag Me Around - The Lowest Bitter
Boy read an article in TIME,
suddenly he's Mr Human Rights
he really puts the Me in Mine
some jaded arsehole, a tourist in less fortunate lives
if it helps, he feels guilty all the time
if it helps, he knows he's a hypocrite
if it helps, he has this voice that's always chattering
an awful sound, it says "drag him around"
anxiety
self-hatred
insecurity
drag me around
paranoia
panic attack
neuroses
drag me around
sat on the Inner Circle,
seeing things that aren't there
with this messed up inner monologue
circling his head
if it helps, you know he's feeling terrified
if it helps, he knows he's a narcissist
if it helps, he has this voice that's always chattering
an awful sound, it says "drag him around"
anxiety
self-hatred
insecurity
drag me around
paranoia
panic attack
neuroses
drag me around
if it helps, he knows he's a hypocrite
if it helps, he knows he's a narcissist
drag me around
paranoia
panic attack
neuroses
drag me around
anxiety
self-hatred
insecurity
drag me around
I really like the twitchy guitar part very much, but not the vocal. Not that it's bad, just drab and steals the fun out of the tune. I do like the "it if helps" BVs but they come and go and then we're back to the drab bits.
I really like the groove in your intro, with the sweepy synth and the choppy guitar part. But I think you had some trouble with your verse melody - the vocals seem to be wandering in and out of key. If I had to diagnose the root cause, my guess would be that you wrote your vocal melody separately from writing the instrumentaion, and either didn't notice that they didn't fit very well or maybe by the time you noticed it was too late to fix it. The effect isn't super-unpleasant to listen to - we're not talking nails-on-chalkboard here - but it does mean I basically bounce off this, because the pieces not fitting together well keep this from being memorable to me.