drums are nice and punchy, but the Qchord (?) strums are frequently off the beat and it really takes me out of thge song. Obviously the parts without drums don't have that problem and fare better, but I don't think this is one of your best.

My main takeaway is the performance questions, mostly having to do with timing issues, both the keys against the drums and the vocals, which don’t always start on the right beat. I think actually though that tightening that stuff up might lead to a very listenable lofi indie tune. My only lyrical nitpick at the moment is the bridge, I just don’t think that last line is a great button, like, I’d like it to be a more memorable and evocative line.

The music box omnichord stuff is very appealing to me, the "nobody likes me" nursery rhyme stuff much less so. The pitch and rhythm issues in the performances hurt this, the core of the song itself doesn't feel strong enough to overcome those challenges, and although I like the omnichord it does feel a bit oppressive after a minute or so. I think the bridge is quite a bit weaker than the rest for a number of reasons; jamming too many syllables in there so it feels rushed, rhyming "time" and "lifetime" (and emphasizing that as "lifeTIME"), the weird specificity of "98%"--I think the lyrical content there is super relatable, but the way you've carried through with it here makes it feel like a first draft. The guest vocals make me feel a bit confused and woozy; I think they help mix up the sonic palette, but I don't think they blend or harmonize well with your lead vocal. I like the long melismatic "go"s in the chorus but would have wanted to hear a cleaner take of those, since unfortunately your arrangement lays any flaws bare.

I like the nursery rhyme feel to the intro before the drop into the darker verse. I do love that omnichord sound and there's good variety in the arrangement. However, there are some iffy pitch and timing issues in the vocals. I wonder if you're trying to record all of your vocals in one take. The last chorus, for example, is much stronger than the first one. If you're not already, you should start comping your vocals. I think it would push your recordings up a level, as your instincts are generally good.