You absolutely nailed the challenge with a top tier composition! This has the proper feel, and kudos for having the courage to tackle those notes at the end that you may have no business trying to hit, but you actually did fairly well overall! Mix is a bit messy, and doesn't feel cohesive. The vocals are noticeably too loud at spots.

LYRICS: [GOOD] 2 points
STRUCTURE: [GOOD] 2 points
PERFORMANCE: [OKAY] 1 point
CONCEPT/CHALLENGE: [GOOD] 2 points
DYNAMICS/MIX: [OKAY] 1 point
SCORE: 8 out of 10

Your chorus melody is the one I find getting stuck in my head the most, which is a good sign. I generally think this is excellently written and performed, albeit held back slightly by the mix - your vocal feels like it shifts between too quiet and too loud in the mix, and there's a roomy feel to it that doesn't quite fit the song IMO - not sure if that's the recording or the reverb your're using. There's also one annoying glitch in the recording at 1:42 which I'm not going to hold against my ranking because it could be some encoding glitch or something but I hope you do a mix that fixes it! Nearly all of my complaints are technical though, in terms of the actual writing and performance my only real issue is that the occasional use of repeated words ("beckoning, beckoning") feel slightly awkward to me. On the whole I thought this was one of the strongest takes on the challenge and I enjoyed it a lot.