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Forum postpowerful vocal delivery really sells the song. thought maybe the vocals were too loud at first, but nope it works. like how stripped down this is.
Entry from Floating in the Water in Nur Ein XVII.
Incorporate at least two different narratives from at least 500 years apart
Floating in the Water (Virgo Power)
sweeter than well water
gentle was your name
stronger than the men who tried to put you down;
they could not get you down
chorus:
you put his head on a platter
you put his head on a plate
and when your world was all shattered
you left it all in your paint
your necklace of thorns
hung with a dead bird
hair floating in the water, you lived dying
but they could not keep you down
CHORUS
BRIDGE:
a deer pierced by arrows
twins entwined by blood and fate
a mirror shows your shadow to you
hope it’s not too late (x2)
CHORUS, repeat last line x3
*credits:
R. Brookes McKenzie: vocals, engineering, mixing
E. Niveous Rayside: guitar, S-Drum pedal*
SpoilerMy song is about Artemisia Gentileschi and Frida Kahlo. Both of them suffered terribly, Artemisia due to being raped at age 18 and Frida due to being impaled by a bus handrail at the same age. But they both persevered and went on to become great artists, though they became better known and their genius truly recognized after their deaths. The "head on a platter" refers to Artemisia's famous painting of Salome holding the head of John the Baptist on a plate. The first verse is about Artemisia and the second about Frida, the necklace of thorns with the bird is from her painting, "Self-Portrait with Thorn Necklace and Hummingbird". The hair floating in the water references a different painting, "What The Water Gave Me".
powerful vocal delivery really sells the song. thought maybe the vocals were too loud at first, but nope it works. like how stripped down this is.
A grungy dinosaur feet rocker. There seems to be a severe lack of grungy sludgy guitar. 94bpm means that there are only 72 measures, in this 3:02 song. The song feels short because you want (I want anyway) 96 measures of song no matter the bpm. Despite that, I dig this. I want to play guitar over this. Cool song! (Yeah, I know the Lowest Bitter is way shorter at nearly the same bpm)
When your vocal comes in it makes me understand why people always used to (and sometimes still) balk at my vocal takes. It's just jarring. Lo-fi doom rock isn't my bag at all. I'm trying to imagine this with professional production and played/sung perfectly and I don't think I'd like it much more. The depressing overtones and mediocre execution prove a fatal combination.