GlennCase
Forum postI like this better than your last couple of entries. Good lyrics, and solid a capella sections. The mix is solid as usual.
North Beach Vampires
by Max Bombast
Ding-dong!
We just saw the moving van and
We thought that we would come
Give you a big introduction (and jam!)
Yes, the jam that Steve made
To welcome you into our town
May we come into your lovely new home?
Oh, we can?
Then there's something that YOU SHOULD KNOW:
Kindly keep your garlic cloves
Stored in airtight containers
Please keep your cross inside your home
And your silverware locked in the basement because
We are the north beach vampires
We'd love if you would come on over for a BITE
We are the north beach vampires
Or we could eat at your place with a formal invite
So why don't let us inside?
We thought we'd stop by again and see how
You're liking your new place
We haven't seen much of you since
The night you invited us over for... "stakes"
It was very insensitive and
We don't mean to say that you discriminate
But here are some things you can do to improve
Before IT'S TOO LATE:
Your eldest daughter's gothic clothes appropriate our culture
The halloween decorations on your lawn...
no, they're not offensive
But they're still up in december!
We are the north beach vampires
And we want to get along
We're never looking for a fight
We are the north beach vampires
Treat us fair or we will have to make it right
And come back over here tonight
I like this better than your last couple of entries. Good lyrics, and solid a capella sections. The mix is solid as usual.
Another fun lyrical take, and interesting instrumental choice (is that ukulele and fuzz bass?) I don't love this as much as some songs from the round but I do feel like it's a step up from your last couple of songs and I don't have much to critique - the only thing that bothers me is the way the second line ends in the middle of a sentence, it feels clunky and sets a bad first impression for the song, although you recover in style.
The first time I heard this, I thought my player had skipped to “Right Round” from the Pitch Perfect soundtrack. I have listened to that soundtrack so many times that I made that connection, don’t ask me why I did. It’s not because of my secret love of Anna Kendrick. Because it’s not really a secret. Anyway it’s a nice mix although the one aside is a little loud to me. This is a good way to use the a cappella, breaking into this big chorus. Nice drum sound too. This song has a better build to it than what I remember of your other songs in this competition, but then it just ends, only having had two gears, and I really felt like we were going to get another gear in this song, either something stepping up at the end or breaking it down with a second a cappella section, that’s where I thought you were going. Feels kind of unfinished, to me.
Love the intro, that doorbell into the a cappella instantly hooks you. Love the layers of vocals in the arrangement. The lyrics are goofy and cute, though a bit at odds with your vocal delivery, which sounds essentially as intense as ever... I think pulling it back a tad except for emphasis, or letting the intensity grow throughout, might work better with the lyrical content. I saw Vom’s comment about the first line ending in the middle of a sentence, which actually didn’t bother me since when you’re singing it you do proceed smoothly, but there were a few little phrasing things that bothered me--the fact that you’re rhyming “you” with the filler word “to” and putting it on a strong beat, the emphasis on the word “invite” bugged me (should be “IN-vite” for the noun). The little dropout on “no, they’re not offensive” was a cute touch. It’s a nice song and very tightly performed, but I didn’t feel like it drew me back for repeat listens as much as the ones I placed higher.