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Forum postI like the contrast between vocals in verse/chorus. That's what I was talking about earlier. Brings urgency to the chorus.
Hey all - my first crack at Nur Ein. Having broken my arm during SpinTunes, I'm hankering after some songwriting now it's (mostly) functional again!
Changing of seasons got me thinking about a relative with dementia who has little concept of time other than the passing seasons and whose spouse is finding engagement hard, so doesn't engage as much as they might otherwise. I wonder whether there's enough left of my relative to understand that - perhaps, sometimes - and this is from their point of view.
The Dutch Widows - Sink or Swim
You told me I could sink or swim
Didn’t care for the state I’m in
But the changing of the seasons and moments and reasons
Explain my suffering
The hours drag on by
And the weeks they seem to fly
Lucidity’s sporadic, yeah you make me panic
Not sure this can ever be fine
Spin spin enlivening
I’ll take the drugs and I will give you love
You told me I could sink or swim
But no-one’s really taken in
Your total lack of interest causes mental distress
There’s a hole where your heart had been
My days just crawl on by
And the seasons seem to fly
Autumn after summer yeah it’s such a bummer
Takes the glint out of my eye
Spin spin enlivening
I’ll take the drugs and I will give you love
Hey hey what d’you say?
Do you see the person you know I once was?
Lie down on the grass
You know this summer never lasts
Darling, hold my hand
Talk to me tonight
You told me I could sink or swim
Couldn’t deal with what was happening
Your conversation’s plastic life so inelastic
My patience is wearing thin
Winter’s drawing by
The windows frame my sky
There’s no rest for the wretched, the view’s quite majestic
Oh please just give me a try
Spin spin enlivening
I’ll take the drugs and I will give you love
Hey hey what d’you say?
Can you see the person you know I once was?
Lie down on the grass
You know this summer never lasts
Darling, hold my hand
Talk to me like you understand
You’re always in my head
I don’t know why
Cos you’re never here
Take me into town tonight
I like the contrast between vocals in verse/chorus. That's what I was talking about earlier. Brings urgency to the chorus.
love the bouncy rhythm, is there actually a retro auto-accompaniment at the base of it all or does it just give that impression? It's cool how it starts out that way and then layers on bigger drums etc. I wish the vocals had a little more clarity - I'm not averse to a little vocal obfuscation but this song has a really nice soaring chorus melody and I think it could be a little more of a feature rather than getting a little swamped by the mix. The internal rhyming in the lyric is fun although some of those lines do feel like you're rushing to fit all the syllables in.