Wins for best production. I love all the space and how well I can hear the drums. Every instrument has its place. The lyrics are great, you do an excellent job of not getting too verbose. The whispery verse vocals are nice, they provide great contrast to the mellow delivery of the chorus. The worst thing about this is the elephant in the room: Where is Erin? If I didn’t expect Erin I would enjoy this more. I still love this though. It’s probably my 2nd favorite after Max. Excellent Job!

Rachel Layne- I really don’t like the synthy music. Awesome vocals, nice melodies. I hope you do the regular instrumentation version of this song. I don’t really care for the vocal/synth doubled melody. I love the “...leave it behind” bits- beautiful. The instrumentation makes me want to skip this.

enjoyed this a lot despite the lack of Erin, vocals sound good and the sound is appropriately atmospheric for the lyric. Only real criticism is that it's a very low-key song, sounds like a solid album track rather than a stand-out, so maybe it doesn't stick in my memory quite as much as some of these songs do.

Although it says porn groove, I would've listed it as demented slide carnival music. Glenn and I were talking about it though, and the vocal needs a bit more separation, level or EQ or something, probably both (you should hear Glenn and I talking about his vocal levels--he likes a pop approach and I prefer a rock approach, re: dominance of the vocal in the mix. When we agree that a vocal is too low, it's probably too low). Great atmosphere again. Love the slide guitar, kind of wanted you to let it lift off at the end.

Rachael: I like the unison vocal/keys hook, it's a nice thing to build a song around. While a lot of the other songs have matched brooding atmosphere to dark story, marrying this sort of happy pop hook (no intentional reflection on Glenn here) to this subject matter is a great move too, and definitely transforms the feel. Ironically or not, this was the same sort of approach that I took to the music for the Agony track--where it is just a vi IV I V, so a dressed-up pop progression, relatively positive sound, for this story of the death of a factory town. But this is even happier, so I guess you get all the iron. We just get an "y"

Rain: With the caveat that it does sound a little last second compared to what you normally do, I think this sounds pretty good. You have all kinds of talent for this type of songwriting, and I'm glad that you were able to make an entry, because I like having more Rain Watt in my ears. I am not totally convinced that this is an end-to-beginning story, as I understood it, or at least it's more oblique than most other people's takes, which is fine. That said, I like the hook, and I like the feel. I do want to hear a fully polished version of it.

So the townsfolk freed a killer, turned him into a cyborg, and sent him to clean up the town from a bunch of corrupt fat cats? If I interpreted that right….I love it. ;p I’d like the vocals to be louder in the mix, and maybe they could be a bit more menacing? I know it’s not told from the killers POV, but the story is dark enough I think it might have helped.