lovely chorus, great use of harmonies and your voices sound so good together. The lyrics are sweet with some nicely specific, nostalgic detail - the jaffa cake line made me smile. The song feels a little simplistic maybe, I wouldn't mind a little extra melodic interest in the bassline maybe, or an additional instrument just adding a little extra, but the vibe does fit the lyrics well.

Intro vocals feel buried, as if sung through a blanket. Not sure if this is to make room for the harmony vocals that come in, but it feels unnecessary. Blanket gets lifted around the one-minute mark, which suggests this was an intentional choice. In my opinion, that probably should have happened a bit earlier. The sibilance feels a bit too hot at times, could use some tamping down with a de-esser. The chorus makes me want to sing along. There's a bit of uncomfortable brightness to this overall, which may be where the sibilance issues stem from, like maybe you realized the whole song was too dark and lifted the entire song with a high shelf at the end, but caused a series of elements to be overly sharp in the process. Odd syllable stresses. "NIRvana song". "cocoNUT". Concept is an old relationship, not super original. Given the specifics it sounds like maybe this is based on a real-life relationship. There's a trap I've fallen into multiple times that you might be in with this one. When writing about personal experiences, there's a wealth of color and depth your memory brings to the story that your audience is missing. It's easy to stop short of actually giving the audience a sense of that depth because it's familiar to you. When you take a look at the lyrics, we learn that the relationship is over and they don't talk to you anymore. We also learn the music and body care products they like. That's about it. I feel like there's a lot more story to be told here that we aren't getting.

I love the build of this song. I really particularly like the prechorus feel and phrasing. I am not the hugest fan of the bridge, because especially in lost relationship songs, it’s traditionally a place for an insight, or a parallel universe look at what’s been established in the verses, or something different. Now you chose not to do that, and I think that puts a higher bar on the bridge to deliver an emotionally satisfying moment, which I personally did not get from this. The Nirvana song line starts going on a road there, but then I don’t know, I guess I think that going to the smells and feels of the person is about the narrator and not the relationship, and that feels a little less meaningful to me. I really dig the relative minor chord on “go” when you hit it (echoes of “Daughter”), and I wish it was that way all the time, because the straight major chord there is a little boring to me.

This one was great, but maybe could use a bit more time in the oven.
Strength: emotional content, hooks
Weakness: some awkward lyrics awkwardly delivered

This is one of the other songs that really stuck with me after the first listen through all these, although it looks like none of the other judges liked this tune as much as I did. This doesn't take a lot of risks, it's not very exciting musically, but I enjoyed listening to it, and I really enjoyed the storytelling and all the little personal details and concrete images in the lyrics. OK, yes, all we know is music and body care, but I like those kind of glimpses into what makes a relationship or a memory feel personal to someone, and I don't feel the need to necessarily know everything about what happened between the narrator and the person they're singing to. The movement between the plain description of the scene over tea followed by that simple but deeply sad line "You're out of reach" is really effective. The chorus melody reminds me of "Pancho and Lefty" in parts. The guest vocal works really nicely here, not overpowering but definitely elevates the choruses, and maybe even gives a little hint that perhaps the person the narrator is singing to is thinking of them as well. A few issues with delivery here; I'm pretty sure "shea" is supposed to be pronounced as "shay" and not "shee-ah" and there are a few issues Evermind already pointed out with the way syllables are stressed.

I prefer the second half of the song to the first. The vocals seem a little too compressed, so sound a bit synthetic. Lovely harmonies that really add to the track though. No box ticking here. "Old parents house" feels like an odd bit of phrasing but it leads to a Jaffa Cake reference, so who cares? To me, the Mid 8 feels like it doesn't add a great deal and is only there because you needed something different in the arrangement. The delivery of the title line has a real classic pop song feel which, of course, is your stock in trade.