The na na na section feels tacked on and completely disconnected from the rest of the song. The chorus isn't really doing anything for me. This seems like more of the same from you, but a lesser version of it. Probably my least favorite Glow Worm song from the competition thus far. It's not horrible, but I have been anticipating that you would have a good shot at being in the final, and you might be in danger this week.

Given how strong your voice is, I found myself really disappointed that your only concession to the challenge was a "na-na-na" hook. I also had some real issues with the distortion on the chorus - I couldn't figure out if it was an intentional decision or a mastering error, and the fact that I was left in doubt means that it didn't work IMO. It's a decent song but a weak take on the challenge and not strong enough on its own merits to overcome that disappointment.

I love this synth patch under the a cappella intro and want to cuddle with it. You have a great way with these really personal lyrics. The transition from verse to chorus is a little abrupt, I feel like it wanted a moment or something there, something else to help shift the gears. I feel the same way about the “oh no” that I felt about “goddamn goddamn” in that it feels forced and less authentic to me, but I guess it’s part of the style that I just won’t get. By the end of the song, the subs feel a little oppressive to me, like I like that they’re big, but I don’t enjoy how they are clipping, again YMMV. I really thought you have such a cannon of a voice that listening to this very minimal version of an a cappella section is a bit disappointing, it’s not the musical/vocal tour de force I was expecting, and that I think you probably need to make this song stand out against the competition. I mean, not that it had to be super big necessarily, although that’s one way to do it, but it didn’t feel special to me.

Fantastically melancholy and catchy. For me, the biggest flaw in this song is the challenge, unfortunately--the “na na na” parts feel cliched to me, and also seemed jammed into the song without really fitting into the feel of the rest of the song... just out of place. I really enjoyed the rest of it--so much feeling in your vocal, good space in the verses, nice concrete images in the lyrics like the cigarette and steering wheel lines, and the “we built an empire” hook makes the whole thing feel desperate and epic. Although I really loved some of them, the lyrics didn’t entirely work for me--that “oh no” seemed cheesy and just felt like a lazy rhyme, and “we were by the water” was a bit of a weird line to me; felt like you were just trying to explain how the title fits in, without it feeling like a natural fit otherwise. I didn’t love the distortion in the choruses Vom mentioned and I tend to agree with mo about the subs feeling oppressive after a while, also. They do make an impact at first though! And I like the subtle squeaky seagull-like synths seesawing around under the verses.