😮 What is this trash???

really like the guitar and organ sounds you're working with here, and the distorted vox fit well. The "la la la" bits really don't work for me though, it feels like you had space to fill and couldn't figure out what to do with it. I think there's a decent song here but this feels like an early demo of it.

Probably if you're gonna add so much distortion to your vocals then it increases the importance of posting your lyrics so I know what you're actually singing about (although judging on most of the other lyrics this fight, not knowing yours might be a bonus unless they happen to be spectacularly good). Musically this is fine, it has a bit of bounce to it, though I wouldn't exactly call these lyrics happy. Even the "day I love the most" line is only happy in a bittersweet way. Anyway, this was a decent effort.

The idea feels very forced, but that's a hell of a hook. Execution: C+, concept: C, hooks: A

A couple of good lines in there but some others that do feel a little forced. I think it would work better if you saved the la la la's for the end (like Hey Jude). The chorus is nicely catchy though. The vocals sound like they were recorded down a phone but still kinda work within the context of the song.

I like the general sound of the instrumentation here, particularly your guitar, and including that kind of messy falling-apart ending, and your vocal delivery kind of reminds me of David Bowie. Catchy chorus, but didn't quite hold up to repeated listens for me, those lyrics felt a bit too throwaway. Performance-wise, it felt like you never got the rhythm or pitch totally nailed down and were always running to catch up just a bit; the la's and oh's felt kind of flat. I wish the vocal wasn't quite so heavily effected, it was just slightly too much for my ear and I found it a bit distracting. Enjoyable and meets the challenge but something about this felt not quite fully developed to me.