fixed version is much improved but the verse and chorus still feel a little divorced from each other. Good vocal performance, the doubling / harmonies are effective but in such a stripped down mix it does stand out when the timing isn't quite perfect.

I like your vocals on this, I think it's a good range for you, they sound nice and strong and clear. Not everything lines up, which you know already (I'll have to go back and listen to the fixed version). OK, listening to the fixed version: the transitions into/out of the choruses are still very awkward and there are still some weird spots as far as timing--I think you could work more on those transitions or even break this up into two different songs. I like that this is about your wallpaper (I assumed "Jake" and "Cheridah" were some kind of fanfic reference till I looked at your liner notes), you should post a picture of it! "Some of the saddest songs sound like jokes" is a cool line. The lyrics seem to bounce around between different things they're focusing on--personal mental health, difficulties in a relationship, hiding your struggles--and maybe narrowing the focus could help it feel more cohesive.

This feels like a very disjointed song, though the fixed version does improve this somewhat. The "saddest songs..." section is definitely the strongest. I feel like you could use that part as the starting point to expand for a rewrite.