NUR EIN
Vom Vorton
June MoonNur Ein XVII
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June Moon
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Entry from June Moon in Nur Ein XVII.

Lyrics must contain no rhyming couplets and no perfect end rhymes.

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June Moon by Vom Vorton
linerzI was born in June and I think astrology is dumb.

you say I can’t be trusted
you discussed my lack of reason
but the seasons and the planets
can be blamed for all my crimes
I’m not looking for excuses
but the truth is out there somewhere
I’m not trying to find it
I’ll just use it as a crutch

because Neptune is in retrograde and Saturn is returning
and I’m learning that my fate is sealed and there’s no point in trying
I’m dying just to lie down and pretend that nothing’s working
I’m lurking in the shadows in the hope that you’ll go away

you can’t blame me for giving up
I’m not responsible for my actions
and I won’t satisfy you with
an admission of my guilt
I’m a Gemini, and that’s why you
might find me a little frustrating
it’s not my fault
I was born under a summer moon

it was a perfect June morning
when I was born into this world
I would be loving and forgiving
joined the living as Friday's child
my future was laid out for me
before I could even stand
if it’s all planned then count me out
count me out

I watch the bubbles in my lemonade, the pattern is upsetting
and I’m betting that my tea-leaves mean that something bad is brewing
I’m doing all I can, which is to say I’m doing nothing
I’m bluffing my way through this life, please leave me alone

(chorus)

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vowlvom

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I didn't spend as much time on this one due to the immunity, but I like how it turned out, especially the harmonies. The rhyming challenge was a lot of fun, really got me thinking differently. Also I was able to record the drums for this one without slowing the track down first, although still obviously lots of clean-up done afterwards!

owl

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I dig that kinda Dr. Dre sounding synth. Good guitar jangles. I love the chorus, it's super hooky! Your approach to the challenge works really well, lots of good slant rhymes and internal rhymes and as a listener I never notice that it's not technically rhyming. I like the lyrical angle and there are a lot of nice lines in here; the "tea leaves"/"brewing" line is clever, also really liked "I'm doing all I can, which is to say I'm doing nothing."

sailingmagpie

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I assume, what with having immunity, you'll just be chilling out this week, right? Oh no, you thought you'd just bust out this absolute gem! This would undoubtedly be duking it out with Moss Palace for top spot, were it being judged. Your drums are sounding better and better week on week. You'll be Jon bloody Bonham by the final! I'm genuinely struggling to find anything negative to pick holes in this track.