The whiney lyric isn't my favoured approach and it must be said (as I'm sure you know) the vocals a bit wavery/pitchy, especially on the chorus. However there's a fair bit here to like in the arrangement. I also like the subtle variation in your style this round but I fear this will be a one off and we'll be back to the Lincoln Parks next time round. Hope not.

Long running times are a consistent issue with your songs, and this one is no exception. I really think this would have more impact if you'd been able to trim it judiciously. And for the record, I don't just look at the timestamp and say "Whoops, you crossed the arbitrary magic number and now your song is officially too long." I say this because some time around 3:00 in most of your songs, I find myself looking at the time marker and wondering how much is left. So how do we tackle that? I'll start by acknowledging that maybe you just don't. You could simply decide "I don't make songs for Jon, so I'm not going to change a thing." And that's okay! No hard feelings. But if you want to tackle my complaint, there are a few approaches to consider. You can change things up from verse to verse or section to section so that the song doesn't feel its length. You can add or remove instruments. Change the playing patterns on the existing instruments in the arrangement (I noticed that you did this, actually! You played longer held notes in the second verse and added that octave vocal, but I think the effect was dampened by your busy verse melody). You could cut sections out entirely—for instance, does this song need a prechorus? Or that eight bar instrumental lead-in to the bridge? Or maybe the third verse could be shortened or skipped? I'll pivot for a moment, though, to what is working here, which for me is the ending. When I did my little intro in the "Starting Line" thread a few weeks ago, I wrote:
Now let's take a look at what happens around 3:45 of your song. "I shouldn't let you drag MEEEEEEEEEEEE!" I also really like how, just a couple of iterations later, you have that lead vocal hit the high note on "Aro-o-o-ound!" and follow that little pentatonic run down. This is exactly the kind of thing I was thinking about when I wrote that part of my judge intro post. That moment when you, as a singer-songwriter, allow yourself to get swept up in the climax of your song. I love this part! I guess my biggest complaint (other than the fact that you don't consistently hit those notes) is that it feels to me like it's a long road to get to this satisfying ending. Obviously you can't just skip straight to the ending, but I think this could be a leaner and better song at around the 3:45-4:00 mark with some smart editing.