I keep moving this one around in my rankings as, like Inflatable Vegetables, I think it's a basically good song that I'm struggling with mix / production reasons more than anything else. The relative levels of the vocals, guitar, bass and percussion all seem off to me and it gives a bad first impression that I'm trying to look past on repeat listens. You certainly have a good take on the challenge and a solid, catchy melody. Some timing issues, especially at the end, but mostly I think this just falls into the tricky-to-rank midsection of songs I feel don't fully reach their potential.

folk puuuuuunk hell yes, we said AJJ

This is an extremely Mountain Goats song in so many ways. It reminds me a lot of “Up the Wolves,” maybe a bit of “Magpie” in the phrasing. And, well, I like the Mountain Goats, but this isn’t everyone’s cup of tea. I like the angle you had on the challenge in your lyrics, and verse 2 was particularly vivid. I thought your vocals were better than last week’s, although the jumps into and out of verse 3 seemed jarring, as your timbre is super different there. The mix isn’t great, as the other judges so far have pointed out--it’s hard to figure out what’s going on in it aside from the very loud guitar, and it detracts from showcasing your songwriting.

I like this take on the challenge, but the song feels a little chaotic to me. I think it's a combination of all of the instruments and then everything sounding like it's at the exact same level. I have no idea if that's what's actually happening, but my ears just feel a little overwhelmed when I listen, and it's hard for me to grab onto the vocal line and hear the lyrics easily. It's a good song overall, and I don't have any notes other than that, and I'm not a technical person who knows production at all, so I am no real help 🙁 Looking forward to more, though!

thanks for posting your liber. Notes- understanding what this is about makes me like it more! I really like the subject, and I think you write about it well. My first impression is that the sounds sound a little distant.