Manhattan Glutton
Forum postThis is fantastic. Cute drum sounds. Nice synth. Very solid - I have nothing critical or interesting to say - in a good way.
Elevator Men
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elevator men
elevator men
their lonely voices tell me that the doors will close and then
elevator men
elevator men
lift me to the 7th floor and bring me down again
they’re tiny little men
they live in this machine
they never answer when I ask them why there’s no 13
elevator men
elevator men
it’s fun to push your buttons set in shiny rows of ten
elevator men
elevator men
I visit them each morning and once more at night time when
they keep things to themselves
they never let me see
the secret floor you can’t get to unless you have a key
elevator men
elevator men
i push a special button so the door will close and then
elevator men
elevator men
i visit them each morning and at evening time again
they’re tiny little men
they live in this machine
they never answer when I ask them why there’s no 13
they keep things to themselves
they never let me see
the secret floor you can’t get to unless you have a key
elevator men
elevator men
This is fantastic. Cute drum sounds. Nice synth. Very solid - I have nothing critical or interesting to say - in a good way.
You had me at the start, but eventually I found myself wanting this to continue down a different path story wise. Really wanted you to explore in more detail these elevator men. But nothing new is learned about this mysterious cult or their secret floor. Musically it sounded fine, you just peaked my curiousity & left me hanging.
OK, you're foiling my efforts here, as there really isn't much I dislike about this. I guess I would have liked a section where you dropped the energy but I suppose that would have gone against fulfilling the challenge.