i like this one. Echoey reverb on the drums make it sound like it's a rehearsal room recording, but that's no bad thing. Some geographical bias may do you favours in the scoring, but deal, people!
Budget Bears
he’s making a scene
“do you know who I am?”
before I’ve had the chance
to properly scan
all the documentation
and his crumpled invitation
he’s an irritation, and
he’s throwing his toys out of the pram
his name’s on the guest list
but he’s acting pretty reckless
if you’re asking, my guess is
that he’s somewhat semiprecious
so I’m waving him through
he is granted admission
but there’s a chip on his shoulder
about the lack of recognition
he’s a major star
with a flashy car
now he heads to the bar
to continue to make an exhibition
he’s sweaty and restless
and increasingly breathless
my guess is
that he’s semisemiprecious
he’s not getting served
the meltdown is glorious
if you can’t be famous
you can always be notorious
he made quite an entrance
but he’s leaving already
my guess is
that he’s semisemisemisemisemisemisemisemi…
i like this one. Echoey reverb on the drums make it sound like it's a rehearsal room recording, but that's no bad thing. Some geographical bias may do you favours in the scoring, but deal, people!
You've got one of the clearest-cut implementations of the challenge. I've heard it said your first line needs to have a huge impact, and this one fits the bill. Very good work with the drums - that's a VST, right? The performance sounds very natural, especially on those fills. I appreciate that your vocals don't let lost as the dynamics of the song change. I wonder if maybe the "semi semi semi semi" section doesn't run maybe one or two measures too long? I guess you were leaning into the challenge. Overall this was a fun listen and veyr pleasant. I've got few negative comments.
I'll admit it, sometimes I see a challenge and my brain immediately tries to find the most annoying way to execute it and then I can't resist following through with it. Hence the approx one million repetitions of "semi". When submitting as Budget Bears I am trying to be a bit more raw and fuzzy, I feel like the end result here was still a bit "soft" but I got closer to my intentions for Round 1, I think. Being earlier in the alphabet is also a bonus.