:!: :!: Too much lichen. Nice bits apart from that.

love that drum beat! The instrumental as a whole is good, vocals have some familiar problems in timing and tuning though. Lyrics aren't your best, but I think a lot of people struggled to come up with an interesting lyrical take on this challenge (myself included).

I'm ranking you up hear based on the music alone. Your vocals are what they are. Normally I would mark down because of them, but rankings have no consequence here.

I just don't find the overly descriptive unlucky narrative a compelling story, but the chorus works at selling it decently. execution: D+, concept: C, hooks: B

Significant pitch and timing issues on the vocals for this track. Another one that sounds like a list of unlucky things and some of the rhymes feel very forced. I do like the skipping groove on the drums though and feel like this song could be improved with a bit more work.

I like the instrumentation here overall, the drums in particular do a lot to carry this along nicely and I like how it gets a bit fuzzy later on, although there are a few programmed-sounding MIDI riffs that kind of take me out of the flow of the song. They just don't feel very natural, I'd love to hear more live performances of the parts, or at the very least "humanize" plugins applied to the MIDI tracks or manually going in and adjusting timing and velocity a bit. The vocals have the same timing and pitch issues I've often mentioned before. I think lyrics are usually your strong suit, but I didn't care for them this time. The couplets, like "alley" and "Sally," often feel like a children's nursery rhyme, and it's the same kind of Wikipedia approach to lyrics that I complained about in a few of the other reviews. The music sounds fairly dark to me, although the lyrics are essentially positive.