NUR EIN
almost 5 years agopassed
2:49
Semiprecious
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Lucky Spoon

Entry from Semiprecious in Nur Ein XVI.

Gradual emphasis of repetitions

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V1
When I met my sweetie I could tell she was a boony
we settled down and always viewed our bunny friends with smiles
So when we were presented with a rabbit opportun-y
We hopped at once to watch the little furries for awhile

Chorus 1
Precious Rabbits oh so sweet
In your little cage so neat
We just love you very much
so please don't run away from our touch

V2
We got the cage home and we realized it was really stinky
But a couple hours and we had really cleaned their coop
We put them back in oh so fresh and hoped to see some binkies
but they would only run around and fill the place with poop

Chorus 2
Precious Rabbits settle down
Night time's not for spazzing around
We still love you through it all
But how did you manage to get pee on the wall?

V3
Well maybe if they're house trained we can remedy that smell
We'll get a bigger cage and liven up their lives in turn
But with more space and bunny toys they only started fighting
And now they're separated 'til they learn.. to behave (SNIP SNIP)

Chorus 3
Precious Rabbits must you fight?
We'll pay for surgery but don't you die!
A few more weeks we'll try once more
And check out our new broom to sweep up the floor (floor of poop)

Final Chorus
Precious Rabbits fur so fluff
I can’t say I’m coo coo for your puffs
Over all you mean no harm
But you belong in a barn
Yes you belong in a barn

Reviews

3 posted notes

j$

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No. Novelty shit. Sorry, just not to my taste AT ALL. It's all really well recorded and performed, but the question "why?" hangs over it like a fetid smell. Of poop.

JonPorobil

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Look, I'll be honest with you. I've had a rough week. My dog got sick, then I got sick. I got better eventually; my dog was diagnosed with diabetes. And the whole time my day job was piling up tasks to anxiety-inducing highs. All of which is to say, who knows? Maybe on a different week I would have been more receptive to this! But where I'm at right now, I just can't with this. It's cutesy and earnest and endearing and I took an immediate dislike to it. I couldn't help but cringe at the last word of almost every line. To your credit - you have what might be the most effective use of the challenge. Your repetition of the word "poop" doesn't just meet the challenge, but also contributes to the emotional core of the song - this dawning realization of the downsides of these fluffy animals that you're still pretty sure you love. But god, all the cutesy language and overwrought delivery sweeps away all the goodwill this challenge implementation earned you. "A boony" rhymed with "opportun-y"? "Hoped to see some binkies"? I just can't get on board. Sorry, try as I might, I just could not meet you at your level this week.

vowlvom

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some well done parts here, the harmonies are on point and the barber-shop bit is really impressive. But... I mean, it's just so annoying. And I know it's viewed somewhat differently in the US for whatever but yeah I'm never going to be on board with the word "spazzing" in a song.

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