Another song where you sound very Guster. And I don't mind. It's a bit of a plod, but the plod pays off with allowing room for some cool transitions. Nice drumming, among all the other things - it could probably come up when it gets drowned out, or ... even throw some distortion on it, if you're into that. I'm generally good with the guitar tones but I feel like they could be more Mesa and less Marshall during the hardest parts. The lyrics are a little clunky. I couldn't understand "finished" at first... I think you could have saved that line for the climax and the end, and even built up your sentence through the song like you do the arrangement.

Nice little haiku. Honestly I’d have finished singing after the first time you sang your sentence. Let the rest of the song be an instrumental.