chocolatechips
Forum postI was thinking this is really good but then the weird bit comes in and I'm thinking it's really great. Love the guitar solo after it too. Definite Ween vibes but I like Ween a lot, so that's good for me.
Watertight
words and music by Cavedwellers
Featuring
Django Phillips (glennny's son)- bridge vocals
Woody Phillips (glennny's brother)- guitar solo and end guitarmonies
verse 1
Aquinas was ingenious in knowing is from ought.
Hobbes mistrusted history, as the bloody English fought.
They did not hold water
Locke held tightly to his bounty, he was proud of what he got.
Chorus 1 & 3
Everything, Sensible
Everyone, Sleep tonight
Then again, Demonstrates
Full of Holes, Watertight
verse 2
Tommy A is a know it all, he’s top in every class
Tommy H talks funny and is always talking fast
they don’t like one another
Johnny is a bragger, and his toys are quite a blast
Chorus 2
Seems so, Defendable
wants to, if they can
damn straight, gravity
nets are, caught tonight
bridge
i made my own little holy grail out of yellow legos last night
my hands got covered in grape juice
because it was not watertight.
verse 3
Randi is so selfish that she barely knows I’m there
Freddie is a downer,and he does not seem to care
they do not hold water
Manny says he thinks he can’t, he never takes a dare
Chorus 4
Everything Seems so
Sensible Defendable
Everyone wants to
Sleep tonight if they can
Then again damn straight
Demonstrates gravity
Full of Holes nets are
Watertight caught tonight
I was thinking this is really good but then the weird bit comes in and I'm thinking it's really great. Love the guitar solo after it too. Definite Ween vibes but I like Ween a lot, so that's good for me.
Really ambitious lyrics this time around; I love it. Looks like Django wasn't up to the bridge melody, but gosh does he put his all into his vocal part. Your vocals are mixed really well, but delivered a little thinly. I'm no expert, but it sounds like you might just be singing from your chest instead of your gut. Not as much "oomph." The guitar solo is awesome, and it kind of scares me to think that there are two Phillips brothers out there both that awesome on the guitar. The third verse lyrics are sort of a de-escalation from the first two, which makes me think they should have been re-written or presented in a different order. That's a minor issue. This is overall an excellent entry; keep it up!