NUR EIN
almost 6 years agopassed
4:23
Rear Window
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Cavedwellers

Entry from Rear Window in Nur Ein XV.

Tell a story from multiple points of view.

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Rear Window
By Cavedwellers feat. Rachel Fairchild

In my rear window where my mistakes go
There’s a trail of broken hearts

Sixteen: I grabbed my keys
Seventeen: I was so ready to please
Found a real sweet girl at the end of my street
And I knew that I would never be beat
But variety is the spice of life
And I wasn’t yet in want of a wife
So I drove down every street in my town
Found other sweet things to drive around

In my rear window where my mistakes go
There’s a trail of broken hearts
There’s the roads not taken, joys forsaken
Blowouts and cold starts

Eighteen and I drove off to school
Where every exception was the rule
Got the twin exhausts and a turbo switch
And the nitrous if I felt the itch
And I got pulled over and I paid some fines
But I never was going to do hard time
Had places to go on the avenue
Want to come with me? I think you do

In my rear window where my mistakes go
There’s a trail of broken hearts
There’s the roads not taken, joys forsaken
Blowouts and cold starts
Little fender benders, big wham bams
Didn’t know what I was capable of
‘Cause I was a ham-handed battering ram
In the china shop of love

Pump your breaks! Your “mistakes”
Are human beings just like you
Put your headlights on and look upon
The loneliness you’re driving to

And the years tear by, mile marker signs
And I wonder what if I had made you mine
But I’ve blown a tire at 31
And the driving isn’t really so much fun
A commuter creeping in the carpool lane
And the four-wheeled monster has been tamed

In my rear window where my mistakes go
There’s a trail of broken hearts
There’s the roads not taken, joys forsaken
Blowouts and cold starts
Little fender benders, big wham bams
Didn’t know what I was capable of
‘Cause I was a ham-handed battering ram
In the china shop of love

Reviews

3 posted notes

GlennCase

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As usual I love your chord structure. This week it is your lyrics that sink you. The concept is decent, but the lyrics are awkward, as are the delivery of said lyrics. I can vaguely hear what sounds like a snare drum in the mix, but I barely hear it. Mix is lifeless, dull, and doesn't do the song justice. The vocal is pleasant enough, but I'm not really hearing any emotion there. We don't hear a lead vocal from your guest until 2:23, and their part is over by 2:41. The guest's appearance feels like a tacked on afterthought to satisfy the challenge. This one has potential, but would need some work to reach it.

LYRICS: [OKAY] 1 point
STRUCTURE: [GOOD] 2 points
PERFORMANCE: [OKAY] 1 point
CONCEPT/CHALLENGE: [GOOD] 2 points
DYNAMICS/MIX: [OKAY] 1 point
SCORE: 7 out of 10

vowlvom

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I can hear a lot of potential in this one, the chorus hook is really catchy in particular, but it feels like it needs an energy boost to really shine as at the moment it feels like it drags a little. It feels like a new-wave anthem played with soft-rock energy. Give me another 10-20 BPM! I really like your guest vocalist, lyrics are fun. But yeah I always feel like the song as a whole outstays its welcome a little.

mo

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Starts with a good hook. You must really hate your drummer to bury the drums so deep in the mix. A rock tune like this really wants DRUMS no? When the guest comes in and the song goes EVEN MORE 80s, that’s the stuff. The eBow is a nice touch, but do you also find that everything on eBow sounds like everything else on eBow? There’s a couple times where the vocal ends on a line in a slightly awkward way, and one pickup that I can’t remember what the lyric is. But good job overall.

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